I feel like all you do here is explain the plot, which is not actually a question. i think that you need to pick more specific questions or tell which ones they are in the essay. Also, is this 1000 words? If not, choose another question and write about it.
For mercedes
as you mentioned earlier, you do need to add more words and quotes. one suggestion for this is to either write about another question or choose a relevant quote with a lot of words. another question i feel thhat you could write about is the question asking if you have read any other books by the author. i think that you are educated on this series and it would be easy to write about.
For Elton
i liked your essay but i have a few reccomendations. First, is it long enough? If not, choose another question to add in and beef up the quotes. second, the quotes do not seem very relevant. Third, I feel like you are a little too casual in your language. you say things like "bad ass super human" and that makes your essay less professional. Other than those few recs, it was good.
For Aleah
- Monday, May 02, 2011 I feel like your essay did not make that much sense. i think you need to fix the spelling and grammar. Also, you explain the plot too much. i think you should pick another question to write about or add on with another one.
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